第四部分： 写作（共两节，满分 40 分）
假定你是李华, 你已经完成国外某大学的网络课程学习。请你给该课程负责人写一封关于 课程学习反馈的邮件, 内容包括: 1. 你的评价; 2. 你的建议。
注意: 1. 词数 80 词左右;
2.可以适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯。
【朱子范文】看完范文老铁们又会发现，范文中的许多高端表达都有在《高考英语3500词按词频分级》中收录。 Dear sir/madam,
I’m Li Hua, a student having just finished your well-received online course — Spoken English for Communication, and I’m writing to give you a feedback.
Personally, I’ve benefited a great deal from the course, with my pronunciation in particular considerably improved. More importantly, I’ve built up my confidence when speaking English, which in turn contributes to my fluency.
To make your course even more appealing and effective, I highly recommend that you expose learners to some English movies that are currently popular in your country, with subtitles preferably.
Yours sincerely,
(93 words)
一、评分原则
1. 总分15分，按照五个档次给分。
2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3. 词数少于60和多于100的，从总分中减去2分。
4. 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。 5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇均可以接受。
6. 如书写较差，以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。 二、各档次给分范围和要求
第五档 （13-15分）
完全完成了试题规定的任务。 —覆盖所有内容要点。
—应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。
Li Hua
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—语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 —有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 —虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。 第四档 （10-12分） —应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 —语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 —应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 达到了预期的写作目的。 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 —虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。 第三档 （7-9分） —应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 —有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。 —应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作的目的。 未适当完成试题规定的任务。 —漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。 第二档 （4-6分） —语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。 —有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。 —较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。 未完成试题规定的任务。 —明显漏掉主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未能理解试题要求。 第一档 （1-3分） —语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。 —较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。 —缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。 信息未能传达给读者。 0 三、该题具体要求 （一）内容要求
（二）应用词汇和语法结构的情况 （三）上下文的连贯性
按照内容要点展开写作，使用恰当的连接词或表达使文章内容连贯。
未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。
第二节：读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
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I'd seen Kim around campus long before the winter of my sophomore (大二) year. I'd admired her from afar. She was pretty with smooth hair, always wearing a bright smile. I'd decided that if I were to choose one girl as my friend, she would be the one. Even though our paths crossed several times a day, I felt as if she lived in some remote corner of a distant universe, where I was sure she had no idea that I existed.
She was there the night when I was invited to a party. A favorite band was playing that night, and I welcomed the chance to get out of my stuffy dorm room and away from hard work. I arrived late and took a seat at a table alone in the back of the room. The others didn't notice me, but I didn't care. I made a decision to hang out for fifteen minutes and then left.
I heard a familiar laugh.... Then, I saw her sitting with her friends. She seemed to shine, making everything and everybody else in the room fade to insignificance. How I wished I were together with her! I looked around and wondered if anybody else saw her, but they all seemed too caught up in their corners of conversation to notice. How could they not? She was shining.
I imagined myself walking up to her and then saying hello. What would she say? Would she just laugh or simply ignore me? Maybe my voice would crack, and I'd turn and slink away as if it had all been a mistake. Then I could simply spend the rest of my college years going around corners and taking roundabout routes to avoid seeing her.
At that moment, she turned toward the back of the room. Her gaze rested on me. I saw her lean over and whisper something to one of her friends, and then she got up and weaved her way through the cluster of tables. 注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;
2. 应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好; 4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:
She was coming toward me. _____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
Many years later, my thoughts sometimes still go back to that night. ______________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________
【朱子范文】看完范文老铁们又会发现，范文中的许多高端表达都有在《高考英语3500词按词频分级》中收录。 Paragraph 1:
She was coming toward me. This was much beyond my expectation, and there I sat, almost frozen, with my face blushing and heart pounding wildly. But soon I collected myself and pretended to be calm. “Hello, Peter. Why not join us instead of sitting alone?” she said softly, her smile melting away all my 3
nervousness. After a few greetings, we talked about a variety of topics, including our hobbies and interesting people we met. It turned out that we had much chemistry with each other, which may account for why she has now become not only my friend but my wife. (96 words)
范文作者笔名“朱子爱考试”，知名教育集团教师解题大赛冠军，著有《高考英语3500词按词频分级》（词汇速记口袋书），正筹备出版《高中英语写作循序渐进》，公众号英文字幕风
Paragraph 2:
Many years later, my thoughts sometimes still go back to that night. I can’t help asking myself, “What if Kim didn’t come up to me at the party?” Most probably, to be honest, I would have missed my lifetime soul mate, tasting the bitterness of regret in corners alone. Now I’m convinced of the significance of taking the initiative, not only in a relationship, but in a career as well as other aspects of life. When our children are old enough, I’ll tell them the story of Kim and me, wishing they could be courageous enough in the pursuit of happiness. (89 words)
一、评分原则
1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2. 评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3. 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。 4. 评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
（2）内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况； （3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性； （4）上下文的连贯性。
5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 6. 如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。 二、各档次的给分范围和要求 档次 描述 — 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。 第五档 — 内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 （21—25） — 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不会影响意义表达。 — 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。 — 与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。 第四档 — 内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 （16—20） — 所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。 — 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。 — 与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。 第三档 — 写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 （11—15） — 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。 — 应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 — 与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。 — 写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 第二档 — 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表（6—10） 达。 — 较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少内容连贯性。 4
第一档 （1—5） 0 — 与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。 — 产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。 —语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。 — 缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。 白卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。 5
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